Monday, July 28, 2008

An Arrow of Love Part 3

An Arrow of Love by Msz MunchkinSZ
Fandom: Yu-Gi-Oh

It's been one week since the events of last chapter. Let's see what creepy not-incest is happening today!

Anzu’s Pov.

1 week later

After what happen that week in the back room no one said anything, I think the guards

were ashamed how Seto beat them merciless. But he was still mad at me for coming to

his rescue.

Oh well today his’s birthday and we finally get to see Mokuba and I bought him a

present. I might as well give it to him now, my dad has been working him so hard it just

wasn’t fair, he deserved much better than this.

“Hey Seto” I said, shyly, it’s so weird talking to him, the way he looks at me and an his

voice its like a dark melody and he’s always comforting me, I’ve grown much close to

him, he’s my first crush and he means more to me than anyone else besides Mokuba.

“Yes Anzu what's up?” he asked looking up from his work. “Umm Seto today’s your

birthday and well I kind of brought you a present” I said blushing ten shades of red.

“Ok what is it lets see it” he said. I know he likes duel monster and I thought of the

perfect gift from him that was in my deck I just hope he likes it. “Here you go Seto

Happy 13 birthday” I whispered to him and peck him on the cheek.

Aww, I was hoping she would go through with the eye transplant.

Seto’s pov

I looked at the gift Anzu handed me for my birthday, no one had done this for me in like

2 years. It was in a case I slowly open in it and what I saw in side took my breath away. It

was the Blue Eyes White Dragon card. I always wanted to hold this card she never told

me she had it even though we talked about duel monster. This card was one of the most

powerful card in duel monster’s and I always wanted it.

It's a love triangle now!

“Hey Anzu is everything alright” I asked softly she looked at me and nodded and turned

away. Liar I’ll try again “Anzu look at me and tell me what's wrong” I said more sternly,

she looked at me with fire in her eyes. “Damit! Seto! nothings wrong I’m fine” liar hm I

wonder if people get pay for lying. “Well it doesn’t look that way to me, what are you

hiding” I was becoming angry at her I thought she trusted me enough to tell me what's

wrong with her. Doesn’t she know how much I love her. Wait what the oh whatever I

love her big deal, its not like she feels the same way.

I'm going to start using "Wait what the oh whatever" in casual conversation now.

“why do you care?” she asked frustrated, I was taken aback with this question, I sighed

“Anzu the reason I care is because you’re a special person to me, you’re the one who’s

always here for me even when your father beats me you comfort me” I paused and looked

at her to see if I should continue her expression I took the risk.”Anzu what I’m trying to

say is that I’m in love with you but its alright if you don’t feel the same way back after all

I’m your brother –, I never finished my statement because she leaped into my arms “Silly

Seto I feel the same way you feel I’ve fallen in love with your since our first encounter”

she said and smiled and hugged me. “I love you too Seto forever and ever till the end of

time” she said looking at me and smiled. I looked at her and planted a kiss on her

forehead and said. “Well I’m glad you feel this way about me but we have to be careful I

don’t want your father to find out about us.”

This is supposed to be a sweet, touching moment. But, it's really damn creepy to me.

When we got to

Mokuba’s room he was excited to see us”Hey big brother and big sister where have you

guys been?” “Hey Moki um we’ve been a little bit busy with school and stuff” I never

lied to my brother before but I didn’t want him to worry it was completely unnecessary.

“Oh ok oh Seto by the way Happy Birthday!!” and handed me a locket to put around

my neck it shaped like a duel monster’s card and in was a picture of me and Mokuba

“thanks kid but where you got this from?” I asked him “One of the maids took me out

with her and I told her and she said she could make me it so I told her yes” he looked up

at me. I smiled it was one of the best birthday ever and I have had a beautiful girlfriend.

Lesson learned: Using the excuse "busy with school and stuff" is enough to please children when they want to know where you've been.

Suddenly, a guard tries to seduce Anzu!

“Hey brat” I

heard someone said, I knew who it was it was on of those guards that assaulted me.

“What do you want” she said with a lot of venom and hatred coming from her mouth.

“what where’s the boyfriend he’s not here to protect you now is he?” he was smirking

“don’t touch me unless you want to get a beating like the last time you jerk!” he touched

her how dare him! She was mine!! “Come on darling don’t be like that” that was it

Another lesson learned: Saying "Hey brat" to girls is a great way to pick them up.

“Don’t you dear touch her you incompetent bastard ” I growled out at him. “Or else I’m

going to have to teach you lesson and you don’t want Gozaboro finding out now do we” I

asked him I wanted to kill him with every fiber in me. He looked shocked that he got

outsmarted by a kid “You little bastard-” he was cut off my Anzu “Hi dad how are you?”

Anzu said sweetly standing next to me.

If calling a guy "incompetent" is outsmarting, I don't know what is.

The man quickly spun around with the look of horror in his face, “RUN!!”

screamed Anzu said and grabbed Mokuba's hand dragging him along with her. We were

all running that we didn’t notice the figure Anzu ran into, she looked up with fears in her

eyes. “I’m sorry Da--dad” she said her eyes looking ready to tear up. I took this as my

chance to step in and defend her “sir we was running away from the guard you hired and-

I couldn’t even get to continue “SILENCE!!” he said to me. “what did I tell you

Anzu?!” smack! “No running in the manor,” smack!.” Why are always you defying me?”

smack !! “STOP! YOU GOING TO KILL HER.” I screamed loudly Anzu was about to

go unconscious.” Shut up you brat!” he snapped at me.

He's going to smack her to death.

“Shut up and be

quiet little missy and listen to every word what I’m about to say” he paused and looked at

me and smirked. “I know all about your little infatuation with dear Seto”he pointed at me.

I heard Anzu gasped “now I’m going to send you away till you can act proper and do

what I want you too you’ll be going abroad for your studies you’ll be coming back when

your turn 16 and that’s that now get packing,” he said coldly “for you are leaving this

mansion as soon as possible now get out of my eyesight.”

I imagine Gozaboro saying this like Toya's dad in Tokyo Crystal Mew.

“you cant do that its not fair I wont go” she said SLAP!! “YOU LISTEN TO ME AND


YOU LIKE IT OR NOT!! NOW BE GONE!!” he roared with fury. “Fine I’ll go but I’ll

be back! And when I come back you’ll be your own downfall!!” slap!!”Get going Anzu”

he told her coldly.

I'm surprised his hand doesn't get tired from slapping preteens around so much.

No Anzu this is my doing I don’t love you as much

as I thought I had. We’re to different people please grasp that” I said the look on her face was

going to haunt me forever I know that. “Seto tell me your joking please?!” she begged “no I’m

not joking Anzu its better this way Good bye.”

I told her and gave her one LAST KISS…..


Chapter seven is the last one right now, and it's a bit boring. However, I will admit the author's grammar and sentence structure VASTLY improves.

The Verdict
While it's very very melodramatic and the grammar is awful the first six chapters, it improves on the seventh and I'm sure the author can do much better stories in the future. 2/5

Thursday, July 24, 2008

An Arrow of Love: Part 2

An Arrow of Love by Msz MunchkinSZ
Fandom: Yu-Gi-Oh

When we last left Kaiba and Anzu, it seems that they had their own little Groundhog Day, as the second chapter was exactly the same as the first. Hmm...

Anyway, it is now the next morning...

Seto, Anzu and Mokuba was sleeping on her bed, Mokuba in the middle and Seto and

Anzu on either side. The sun was shining threw their window Anzu was the first to wake

up she looked over at the her new brothers, and smiled. After her out burst last night she

and Seto got to know each other a little bit more and they had a lot in common for

example they both like duel monsters Seto told her his favorite card is the Blue Eyes

White Dragon but he never got a chance to buy it and that there super rare and they

only 4 that was built by Pegasus.

I had no idea that cards were actually built. Do they have little scaffolding, too?

Going to Anzu’s pov:

And also his birthday is coming up a few days from now so I don’t know what to get him

maybe I could get him blue eyes? I don’t know but hopefully he’ll like it. I was lost in

thought when the door to my bed room opened and in stepped the butler Nesbitt he never

really liked me, but he was never bad to me either.

I don't know if Kaiba would like an eye transplant for his birthday.

“Miss Anzu your father wants to see you and your brothers immediately in his office, so

if I were you I wouldn’t waste my time day dreaming” he sneered and walked out of the

room. Oh great ‘just what I need an ugly butler ordering me uhh what a good way to

begin the day’, she thought. I might as well wake up Seto and Mokuba.

“Mokie wake up sunshine” she said softly to his to ears he was up and he looked happy to

see me and his brother besides him. He soo cute I just hope my father doesn’t lay one

finger on him.

It's okay, guys! They aren't blood siblings! It's not creepy at all!

So, then Anzu, Mokuba, and Kaiba get into a pillow fight. Awwwwwwww...

“PILLOW FIGHT!!” Mokuba screamed and start hitting both of us with the pillow. We

all was having so much fun we continue yelling and screaming for half an hour or so.

Then my father came storming in my room and looking mad as hell and behind him was

Nesbitt the butler smirking at me.


“What the hell is going on here?!,” he yelled

“didn’t I tell you to meet me in my office and hour ago!!” I looked over at the Seto and

Mokuba, he was behind his big brother and he looked scared I looked at Seto and what I

saw shocked me he was looking at my father with determination on his face. My father

noticed this and slapped him and then said

“don’t look at me like that boy I will not tolerate this from the two of you!” he shouted

“Nesbitt take Mokuba out of here and give him something to eat I have to teach my two

disobedient children a lesson,” he said. He came over to Mokuba and practically had to

pried him off of Seto’s arm. He looked over at me for assurance so I just nodded, even

my father would never stoop that low and hit a three year old. Mokuba let go of Seto’s

arm and exited the room with Nesbitt.

Run-on paragraph much?

“Follow me” my father said in a freaky calm voice, we followed him threw the mansion

then we came across a room that I never saw before, there are parts of the mansion I’m

not allowed to go to I guess this room was one of them.

When we entered this room I was shocked in it was two beds, a bathroom but no

windows. That was when my father decided to speak he turned around and smirked at me

and Seto and started to talk.

“Now children this room is going to be shared by the two of you” he paused and continue

“and I expect it to be clean and kept well,” this was too much me sharing a room with


Woah woah woah. This is some Flowers in the Attic shit right here.

“uh father if you haven’t noticed I’m a girl and I need personal space” I stated simply not

to be mean or anything but sharing a room with a guy can be scary.

“Why Anzu I’m highly offended you don’t want to share a room with your brother Seto,”

he said coming towards me. I was slightly taken aback, what is he planning? I looked

over at Seto and he had the same look on him when Gozaboro hit him.

Then all of a sudden SMACK!! I think everyone in the mansion heard that slap it hurt

and the last thing I heard was someone screaming my name and then everything went black.

Aw hell, this is turning into a V.C. Andrews novel already.

“Now Seto this is your private tutor Mr. Makashi whatever he teaches you, you better

remember and also he has a right to whip you when you make any mistakes and the same

goes for my pathetic daughter as well.”

This man was NUTS first he knocks his daughter out and then he gives some tutor a right

to hit me how I hate this snake.

Prediction: Mr. Makashi is going to be a fundamentalist Christian.

“Step-father you’re a real snake--” before I even get to finished my sentence a book came

out of no where and hit me right in the head. then a punch came to my stomach I fell to

the floor trying to catch my breath when he said

“Well Seto you keep on rebelling and there will be more where that came from you got

that? you good for nothing piece of shit” he said. I didn’t had enough strength to argue so

I just said a tiny ‘yes’ and he smirked and started to tell me how things are going to from

now on. Just then Anzu started to stir

Then, Anzu is going to look at her pubescent body in the mirror when Kaiba accidentally comes down from the attic and sees her naked.

“well well if it isn’t our little princess what's wrong? You look like your hurt, well that’s

what you get for talking to your Daddy like that,” he sneered and smirked. “Well Seto I

should let Anzu and you get to your studies now don’t want you slacking now do we?”

“Huh what happen?” she asked softly before I could even response Gozaboro grabbed her

by her hair and said ”don’t ask questions pay attention to what you are taught don’t try to

distract Seto while he’s learning you little Whore” he said Anzu’s eyes widened and tears

start to fall “Now apologize for what you said to me yesterday and apologize for being a

disrespectful brat and mean every word you said.”

“I’m sorry for what I said to you and I’m sorry that I’m a disrespectful brat Father.”she


But suddenly, Anzu's father walks in and thinks that they're going to have sex! So, he tries to force Kaiba to cut Anzu's gorgeous hair, but he refuses! The next morning, Anzu wakes up to find her hair covered in tar.

So, two weeks later, Anzu and Kaiba are still living in the same bedroom.

Hell that’s all its been for me and Seto that bloody tutor-or was getting on my nerves I

hadn’t had a descent meal just water and breakfast and something for lunch. My father is

working hard on Seto, our tutor-or is teaching us about profits and involving business I

don’t want to be a part of this I want to be a dancer or a kindergarten teacher not some

bloody business person. I haven’t spoken to my little Mokie in weeks I asked my father

how was he and he told me to mind my own business. Right now Seto is with my father

training, my dad thinks he needs to toughens up and while there at it he’s discussing

business with him. Me and Seto were really close to each other now, I means he’s a really

sweet person and his eyes I think I could get lost looking in them. Holy Crap!! I think I

have a crush on my brother, not good he’s way too perfect for me, and he’s always strong

and doesn’t cry. And me I’m just a weakling brown hair blue eyes so what? Nothing

special, I’m just a plain Jane. How am I to get over this we live in the same room we

share the bathroom we practically live like a married couple. Hmmm being married to

Seto ‘uh what are you thinking he’s your brother for god sakes HE DOESN’T LIKE

YOU!GET OVER IT! HE’LL THINK YOUR SICK!’uh I have a headache I really need

some fresh air hm maybe I could just try and sneak out for a little while and clear my silly thoughts.

And then Anzu's father will slowly stop visiting them, except for when he lets them sneak into a Christmas party so they can see his new wife and their grandpa (who's a real jerk, lemme tell you).

Pain that’s all I can feel right now just one simple mistake and you get a chair handed to you.

“Now Seto I’ll ask you again what did I just say?” he asked. If your wondering what he’s

doing right now, my step father is teaching me the rules that he was taught while growing

up and let me tell you some of these rules are very stupid.

“Show no signs of pain, pain is weakness sir” I said trying to stand straight. He looked at

me “and what were you just doing Seto” he asked smirking.

But then, Anzu and Kaiba realize that they have some weird attraction toward each other and then have sex on a dirty old mattress.

“I was showing pain sir” I said but it hurts when he throws a damn chair or when he uses

his cat-o-nine tails. Its hurts when he hit me across my back with it. The stupid thing has

nine ends I felt like a slave. Everyday when I do something wrong he uses that on my

back. I never told Anzu this because she’ll would practically scream at him then he’ll

probably use it on her. Sharing a room with her isn’t bad, but she’s a girl and they like

privacy so I try to give her much as possible. We’re really closer now then ever she told

me about her childhood hey at least she had a memorable one. I haven’t seen Mokuba

these past few days I hope the kid was hanging in there. I have so many work to do like

tomorrow Gozaboro was going to test me on what I learnt so far on game theory and that

kind of crap, I never new being in the business field was so hard, you had to learn about

economics and social studies negotiate deals and bargains and contracts.

“Seto go to your room and tell my daughter I would like to see her we have business to

discuss” he stated simply.

Meanwhile, Mokuba dies of arsenic poisoning because Anzu's father didn't want him to get in the way of his relationship with his wife.

“I want to see my brother I said ignoring his comment” he looked back at me with fury in

his eyes and came up to me and grab by my collar “Did you not hear what I asked you to

do!!” he said shaking me and then threw me across the room.

“Seto I hate it when people are asked to do something and they want to go and do

something else” he said walking up to me. Just then two of his guards came in and

Gozaboro turned to them and said “makes yourselves useful and take him to the back

room and teach him a lesson that he’ll never forget,” he commanded. Oh no this cant be

good “what!! I didn’t do anything all I did was ask to see my little brother” I yelled as his

men were dragging me out of the room. I try to get out of their grip but they were really

strong. They were pulling me while I was shouting

“Damn you Gozaboro you’ll never get away with this mark my word!!,”I screamed out

loud. I was in the room where Gozaboro requested for the men to take me.

Did I mention the arsenic was in powdered donuts?

“Hey kid shut up or it’ll be ten times worse” he said and with that he started punching me

while the other guy was holding me. He threw punches in my stomach I hid my pain I let

them punch me. I would not let them see how weak i am, I’m strong I can fight this. They

kept taking their turns hitting me mocking me, telling me how I deserve this I choose for

it to happen. The other guy punched me in my face, I was going to pass out I had to stay

strong I would not let my emotions get the best of me.

“Seto!!” I heard someone scream, I knew that voice it was Anzu, she sound frighten I

looked in her direction and saw her running towards me. I felt her grab me in her hug, she

was crying she hates seeing me in pain she told me that herself, she hates seeing me in

pain, she probably will freak out but I think I love her, but I’ll never tell her because

she’ll probably freak out and runaway and never speak to me again. I held Anzu in my

arms, she was sobbing these past two weeks had took its toll on her.

“Why Seto why!!,” she screamed

Eventually, Anzu and Kaiba steal enough money from Anzu's dad to get some bus tickets and get the hell out of Dodge.

“shh Anzu everything’s going to be alright” I tried to tell her, sooth her, but she was then

snatched away from me by one of the guards. He was pulling her hair and he had that

look of lust in his eyes which was quiet disturbing. The other one was smirking at me he

started to punch me while Anzu screamed these punches were ten times worse.

“Seto no!! leave him alone! Please leave him” she yelled trying to free herself. I tried

dodging him. “What sweetheart can’t you see how pathetic he is, cant even stand up to

Keith you are going to watch him get his ass kicked while I hold you,” he laughed. That’s

it I felt a sudden adrenaline rush to me. I kicked the man where it counts and he felt to the

floor where it counts. Then I start punching him,

“hit him Seto hit him!!” Anzu screamed “let him feel your pain hit him hurt him!!” she

yelled. The guy on the floor was literally bleeding, at least this was what Gozaboro taught

me. “Come on Anzu lets run” and together we made our way to our so called room.

To be continued in 4 other books.

Wednesday, July 23, 2008

Break Post: My first flame!

Checking my Devart today, I came across a flame!

"Honey, remember that blog entry you did about crappy OBJECTION drawings? Don't criticize others when you can't draw worth crap, m'kay?"

When I went to go tell her my drawings don't have deformed heads, I find out she blocked me! Ha, what a coward. Goes to show you they can dish it out, but they can't take it.

By the way, let's do a comparison, shall we?

Here's my latest submitted work:

Here's her's:

I admit, she can do alright bodies, it's just her heads need some work. I mean, look:

Also, joke's on her, I'm going to art school to improve as an artist so I can do more than anime-style whatnot. And at least not all of my characters have big KAWAII ^_^ eyes and malformed heads.

Silly fangirls.

OH BOY UPDATE: Looks like she deliberately "blocked" her Devart on her own browser so she wouldn't see my comments anymore. By the way, I consider myself a fangirl, too. We fangirls are silly beings. We shouldn't take ourselves seriously. Oh, and she left three more comments on my Deviantart. Someone's a little cranky.

2010 Retrospective: Haha, oh memories. I still have her comments on my profile, so go ahead and read them. I admit, my responses probably weren't the best ever, but whatever. Heat of the moment stuff.
But, yeah, like the above says, she left a bunch of comments on my profile and claimed that she blocked me because I was "just going to flame [her]", which wasn't going to be the case, but whatever. She ended up writing a long journal entry about how she now hated Deviantart because everyone was mean and she was going to block it by using the parental controls on her browser, just so she wouldn't see all the mean comments anymore. To be honest, if she just would have said "I saw your blog and your comments struck a nerve with me. Can you please take it down?", I would have obliged. But, instead, she tried to make herself look like a martyr.
Anyway, all of her artwork and journal entries have since been deleted, so there isn't much use in copy/pasting those links.

Sunday, July 13, 2008

An Arrow of Love Part 1

An Arrow of Love by Msz MunchkinSZ
Fandom: Yu-Gi-Oh

Yeah, weird updates and shit. I know.

Anyway, today's story is about what happens when Seto Kaiba becomes Anzu Mazaki's step-brother and, oh, abusive parents.

Seto pov continue…

Seto pov continue….


Anzu came in looking like she’s just been beaten tears were running down her face, and

her face was black and blue and she was bleeding.

“Anzu!! Anzu!! Are you alright what happen?!” Mokuba cried and rushed over to her,

she was in pain I can tell she stood up for me in front of her dad, she’s a very brave and

courageous person to endure that.

Must...resist...Zero Wing joke...

“Its alright Mokuba’s it not that’s bad I’ve had worse” she stated smiling slightly but it

didn’t reach her eyes. She lean down to gather Mokuba in her arms and told him that

everything is going to be ok, and that Gozaboro wont ever harm him. He would never

harm my little brother not as long as I’m here, I made a promise to be here for him and

I’m not a person to break my words. Anzu hasn’t talked to me as yet, I gave her a look

over the marks are starting to show but she stopped crying along time ago now she was

was sitting on the floor with Mokuba in her arms rocking him slightly and telling him that

everything’s going to fine, she’ll always be there for him. That was touching I never met

someone who was caring as her.

Run-on paragraph much.

“Seto can you please come help me up here? I think Mokuba’s asleep”, she stated I went

over to her and Mokuba was asleep, I picked him up from her and put him on her bed.

There was no where in hell was I going out back there not until I get some answers from

Anzu. After I finished tucking him in I turned to her and sighed.

“Come on lets talk out here”, and she stepped out on her balcony, it was quiet for a few

seconds before she started to talk.

Oooh, a romantic moment!

“Remember when I left to go downstairs to get you an ice-pack and tissue for your

mouth?” I nodded for her to continue “My dad he was waiting for me in the doorway and

Seto he told me your going to get discipline, that’s not good Seto, and he’s

going to get rid of me cause he thinks I’m going to distract you and then I asked I’m if

he was done and he just smirked and grabbed me by my hair and start slapping me I tried

to escape him but he was too strong for me I screamed but no one heard me,” I just stood

dare looking at her in shocked she just endure all of that because of me , I suddenly felt

anger towards Gozaboro how dare him treat her that way?! What kind of father is he?

“and even if they did they wouldn’t have done anything about it,” she stated and just

smiled slightly,

Oh, at least it's not rape or anything.

“How did you convinced my dad to adopt you?”, I just shrugged

“I challenged him in chess we made a deal if I won he adopted me and Mokuba but now I

think I’m going to regret it”, I told her. she just looked at me and smiled and told me

“Seto you’re a KAIBA now we don’t run from our problems we face them, I know your

going to make good CEO for Kaiba Corp,” I was shocked me being a ceo? I don’t think I

can do that, but wait don’t Kaiba- corp is mostly about building weapons of destruction??

So many questions so little time, and wait isn’t she Gozaboro Kaiba’s only child and

heiress to the fortune why me??

When was Anzu ever heiress to the Kaiba Corp?

“Anzu what makes you think I’m going to run Kaiba-Corp one day?” I asked her, she just

looked at me and smile “Seto I’m a type of person who abhors to violence and building

weapons of destruction isn’t something I like to do. Our father is a man with power but

he likes to abuse that right, he likes to hurt people if anything doesn’t go the way he

wants he throws a fit and he normally takes his anger out on people”. What have you

gotten yourself into Seto?? Maybe I should just leave with Mokuba no!! Seto you

promised him the best in life and that’s what he’s going to get I will take over KC and I

will work my but off if I have to and rebuild everything and turn it into a gaming company that was always one of my dreams and to be duel monsters champ hmm so why not give it ago Seto?

What? This is making less sense as it goes along.

“Yes Anzu we’re friends” I stated simply and looked up at the stars, they reminded me of

my mom and she said that stars gave us hope. Thank you mom for sending me a new friend

like Anzu. For the remainder of the night me and Anzu talked we asked each other simple

questions and got to know each other it was getting late so I told her she should sleep but

she was very stubborn that’s one thing we had in common we’re both tenacious and we

could be vain when we want too, but other than that she’s not a bad person the more I

learn about her the more I feel to be there for her as her friend and not her brother ( he doesnt feel like her brother he feels more like a friend people) .

I looked at the stars and sighed and went to the room where Mokuba and Anzu was

sleeping, as soon as my head hit the pillow I was asleep.

Normal Pov:

Unknown to Anzu and Seto there was someone watching them from the dark with a very angry expression.


The twist is that chapter two is exactly the same as the first.

Next time: Chapters three and four of this terrible epic.